We were sitting on the mat our hands were held so tightly I thought my hand was going to break. ” 3rd place goes too…” the relief I felt when we weren’t called up is indescribable, this means we’re one step closer to winning. ” 2nd place goes too..” my heart was beating out of my chest, in a matter of seconds we’d find out if our hard work would pay off. ” Fusion All Stars!” I looked around the tears blurring my vision, did I hear him right? ” AND THE WINNER IS…. THE WHITE PATRIOTS!!!!!” all the months we put in definitely paid off!
Hello Molly,
You were able to build the tension and excitement in your story by using a count up to first place. Well done.
As winners, I wonder what the prize was? It must have been something special.
Ross Mannell (Team 100WC)
Teacher (retired), N.S.W., Australia